Author: keejasfisher

AVS: WEEK ONE

The Final Revision

Explanation of Revision

There was not a lot of changes made in the final revision of this short script. Feedback from my peers showed that there were no formatting errors and that my script was free of the top 20 most common script errors but that was not entirely true. Through giving feedback to my peers I discovered a couple minor things I wanted to alter in my script. I saw that in some cases I was telling more than I was showing the expression of my characters. I changed the action line and scene description to show the reader the characters expression rather than to say the character had angry eyes. 

Instead of saying, 

Darren looks at her in shock.

The action line now reads,

Darren looks at her with his eyes wide.

I made the same changes to the following action line,

Rose crosses her arms and looks at him with angry eyes.

It now reads,

Rose crosses her arms and looks at him with scrunched brows and squinted eyes.

            I was also missing a physical description of Darren in his introduction to the scene. 

The original line read,

DARREN (32) grabs his wallet off the table and his keys JINGLE as he takes them off the hook.

It now reads,

DARREN (32), tall and fit, dressed in a gray sweatshirt and blue jeans, enters the kitchen. He grabs his wallet off the table and his keys JINGLE as he takes them off the hook.
These changes were made to smooth the flow of the story and to give a visual point of reference to the readers so that the actions of the characters are more clear in the context of the story.

Live Your Life

By: Chief Tecumseh

So live your life that the fear of death can never enter your heart.
Trouble no one about their religion;
respect others in their view, and demand that they respect yours.

Love your life,
perfect your life,
beautify all things in your life. 

Seek to make your life long and its purpose in the service of your people.
Prepare a noble death song for the day when you go over the great divide.
Always give a word or a sign of salute when meeting or passing a friend,
even a stranger, when in a lonely place.

Show respect to all people and grovel to none.

When you arise in the morning give thanks for the food and for the joy of living.
If you see no reason for giving thanks, the fault lies only in yourself.
Abuse no one and no thing, for abuse turns the wise ones to fools and robs the spirit of its vision.

When it comes your time to die,
be not like those whose hearts are filled with the fear of death,
so that when their time comes they weep and pray for a little more time to live their lives over again in a different way.

Sing your death song and die like a hero going home.

Reference

SimonSomlai (Ed.). (2017, January 8). Live Your Life – Chief Tecumseh (Poem). Retrieved January 30, 2020, from http://www.basicgrowth.com/live-your-life/

Knowledge is Everything!

Sometimes we must take time to learn what we want before we can go after it. Take some time to do some research, and find something you might want to try, then go for it.

"Read, read, read. Read everything -- trash, classics, good and bad, and see how they do it. Just like a carpenter who works as an apprentice and studies the master. Read! You'll absorb it. Then write. If it's good, you'll find out. If it's not, throw it out of the window."
-William Faulkner

Find Your Inspiration Here

Invictus 

BY WILLIAM ERNEST HENLEY

Out of the night that covers me,
      Black as the pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be
      For my unconquerable soul.

In the fell clutch of circumstance
      I have not winced nor cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
      My head is bloody, but unbowed.

Beyond this place of wrath and tears
      Looms but the Horror of the shade,
And yet the menace of the years
      Finds and shall find me unafraid.

It matters not how strait the gate,
      How charged with punishments the scroll,
I am the master of my fate,
      I am the captain of my soul.

I have dreamed of this so long that now that I have made it this far I sometimes have to pinch myself. My intentions for my Mastery Journey is to learn as much as I can and to find as many ways as is possible to put that knowledge to use. This poem is an inspiration to me, a reminder that I am strong and capable of accomplishing anything I set my mind to. It speaks of showing bravery and strength in the face of adversity. “I am the master of my fate/ I am the captain of my soul” (Henley).

Reference

Henley, W. E. (n.d.). Invictus. Retrieved January 17, 2020, from https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/51642/invictus